Most of the other things Rick has pointed out are minor- choice of words, typos, the need to add further references for clarification. I'm still marvelling at the fact that I've written over 10,000 words. And most of it is coherent and makes sense!
And just so this isn't all about my boring academic progress, Extremely pretty hi-res stills of next week's episode of Robin Hood. I still hate facial hair on guys, but Dexter Fletcher is just....guh.